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diff --git a/content/drafts/friendship-practices-of-the-secret-sharing-plain-speech-valley-squirrels.md b/content/drafts/friendship-practices-of-the-secret-sharing-plain-speech-valley-squirrels.md
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--- a/content/drafts/friendship-practices-of-the-secret-sharing-plain-speech-valley-squirrels.md
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 In the days of auld lang syne on Earth-that-was, in the Valley of of Plain Speech in the hinterlands beyond the Lake of Ambiguous Fortune, there lived a population of pre-intelligent squirrels. Historical mammologists have classified them into two main subspecies: the west-valley ground squirrels and the east-valley tree squirrels—numbers 9792 and 9794 in Umi's grand encyclopædia of Plain Speech creatures, but not necessarily respectively: I remember the numbers, but I can never remember which one is which.
 
-Like many pre-intelligent creatures, both subspecies of Plain Speech Valley squirrels were highly social animals. Much of their social lives 
+Like many pre-intelligent creatures, both subspecies of Plain Speech Valley squirrels were highly social animals.
 
+Much of their social lives 
 
-(well, there's a reason the ascension of Earth-than-was would be sparked by the _H. sapiens_ line of hominids some millions of years later, rather than by the Plain Speech species 9792 and 9794.)
+
+(well, there's a reason the ascension of Earth-that-was would be sparked by the _H. sapiens_ line of hominids some millions of years later, rather than by the Plain Speech species 9792 and 9794.)
 
 
 sharing secrets
@@ -20,6 +22,6 @@ sharing secrets
 
 And beside them, a friend or a mate 
 
-"_I'm_ your friend. _I_ understand you. You can share your secrets with _me_."
+"But _I'm_ your friend. _I_ understand you. You can share your secrets with _me_."
 
 "That's not what I meant."