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@@ -9,21 +9,19 @@ _ the hill he wants to die on (conclusion for "Zevi's Choice"??)
 _ Tail vs. Bailey / Davis vs. Yudkowsky analogy (new block somewhere)
 _ mention that "Not Man for the Categories" keeps getting cited
 
+first edit pass bookmark: "In June 2019, I made"
+
 pt. 3 edit tier—
-_ fullname Taylor and Hoffman at start of pt. 3
-_ footnote clarifying that "Riley" and Sarah weren't core members of the group, despite being included on some emails?
-_ be more specific about Ben's anti-EA and Jessica's anti-MIRI things, perhaps in footnotes
+✓ fullname Taylor and Hoffman at start of pt. 3
+✓ footnote clarifying that "Riley" and Sarah weren't core members of the group, despite being included on some emails?
+✓ be more specific about Ben's anti-EA and Jessica's anti-MIRI things
 _ Ben on "locally coherent coordination": use direct quotes for Ben's language—maybe rewrite in my own language (footnote?) as an understanding test
-_ set context for "EA Has a Lying Problem" (written by Sarah, likely with Michael's influence—maybe ask Sarah)
-_ clarify schism (me and Vassar bros leaving the EA/rat borg?)
-_ set context for Anna on first mention in the post
-_ more specific on "mostly pretty horrifying" and group conversation with the whole house
-_ paragraph to explain the cheerful price bit
-_ cut words from the "Yes Requires" slapfight?
-_ better introduction of Steven Kaas
+_ ask Sarah about context for "EA Has a Lying Problem"?
+✓ set context for Anna on first mention in the post
+✓ more specific on "mostly pretty horrifying" and group conversation with the whole house
+✓ cut words from the "Yes Requires" slapfight?
 _ "Not the Incentives"—rewrite given that I'm not shielding Ray
 _ cut many words from "Social Reality" scuffle
-_ is "long May 2020" link still good?
 _ better context on "scam" &c. earlier
 _ meeting with Ray
 _ Ben's "financial fraud don't inquire as to the conscious motives of the perp" claim may be false
@@ -46,7 +44,7 @@ _ footnote explaining quibbles? (the first time I tried to write this, I hesitat
 _ "it was the same thing here"—most readers are not going to understand what I see as the obvious analogy
 _ first mention of Jack G. should introduce him properly
 _ link to protest flyer
-_ weird that Kelsey thought the issue was that we were trying to get Yudkowsky to make a statement, which he never does; from our perspective, the issue was that he _had_ made a statement, and it was wrong
+✓ weird that Kelsey thought the issue was that we were trying to get Yudkowsky to make a statement
 
 pt. 4 edit tier—
 _ mention Nick Bostrom email scandal (and his not appearing on the one-sentence CAIS statement)