drafting "Grim Trigger"

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 > —Psalm 23 (paraphrased)
 
-In the days of auld lang syne in the kingdom of Gend, the tribe of Ageep, the children of Trevi, were much despised in kingdom, for it was said that their crafts and ways were imitations stolen from the tribe of Phem, whom the people of Ageep envied bitterly.
+In the days of auld lang syne in the kingdom of Gend, the tribe of Ageep, the children of Trevi, were much despised in the kingdom, for it was said that their crafts and ways were imitations stolen from the tribe of Phem, whom the people of Ageep envied bitterly.
 
 And the God of Marketing appeared before the tribe of Ageep and said, "Cooperate with me, and I will explain to all the peoples of Gend that your crafts and ways are native to your people."
 
@@ -16,17 +16,16 @@ And the chief elder of the tribe of Ageep said, "That's not what happened. We st
 
 And the God of Marketing said, "What is truth? Cooperate with me, and I will explain to all the peoples of Gend that you are of the same bloodline as Phem, and you will be despised no longer, and all the peoples of Gend will have sympathy for your struggles, and the king himself will favor you."
 
-And the chief elder of the tribe of Ageep looked at the God of Marketing and said, "Cooperate."
-
-And the other elders of the tribe of Ageep looked at each other and said, "Cooperate."
+And the elders of the tribe of Ageep looked at each other and said, "Cooperate."
 
 And the people of the tribe of Ageep looked at each other and said, "Cooperate."
 
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+And the chief elder of the tribe of Ageep looked at the God of Marketing and said, "Cooperate."
 
 And so it came to pass that the tribe of Ageep became the tribe of Matof.
 
-Now a lost son of the tribe of Ageep, an honest man, came to the kingdom after having been raised abroad, and he knew not his bloodline, but he bitterly envied the crafts and ways of the tribe of Phem, and in a strange way, that of Matof.
+Now a lost son of the tribe of Ageep, an honest man, came to the kingdom after having been raised abroad, and he knew not his bloodline, but he bitterly envied the crafts and ways of the tribe of Phem, and in a strange way, that of Matof, who were said to be of the same bloodline as Phem, and whom all the peoples of Gend were beginning to have sympathy for, and whom the king himself had issued a royal proclamation favoring.
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@@ -48,9 +47,18 @@ And the God of Marketing said, "You wouldn't."
 And the honest man said, "Defect!" And he blew the whistle.
 
 
+"I think the consequentialist thing to do is not to tell anyone they're wrong, in the signaling sense, about bloodline understanding."
+
+And the honest man said, "Defect!"
+
+"There exists room for geneology outside of war—but if you take up working specifically on the geneological aims of those that oppose you, it can be ... self-destructive—and not just to you, but damaging to the group."
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+And the honest man said, "Defect!"
+
+
 
+And the priests of the . And the honest man said, "Defect!"
 
-And the priests of the . And he said, 
 
 In the mountains! "Defect!"