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-TODO finish before I can vet and ship pt.s 1–3
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-✓ "People ..." introduction
-✓ finish existing 5150 scene scraps
-✓ CCRMC facility note
-✓ footnote about telephone game of "self present"
-✓ interacting with the outpatient program
-✓ Vassar discourse I
-✓ community health check
-✓ Vassar discourse II
-✓ ordering DIY hormones
-✓ asking Anna for promise
-✓ Vassar discourse III
-✓ proposed credit-assignment ritual
-✓ emailing Blanchard/Bailey/Hsu/Lawrence/Cantor/Dreger
-✓ tie-off
-✓ "Roberta" situation
-_ overheating in April, staying at Volterra, Hamilton purchase
-_ BABSCon
-_ "my call with Western Psychiatric's Manager of Patient Relations"
-_ final credit assignment ritual
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-_ phenotypic capture and memetic identity (insert into pt. 1)
-
-pre-edit phase—
-_ footnote about "density of outright falsehoods"
-_ security code drama?? ("Although, speaking of documenting" 2 March)
-_ integrate 5150 scene scraps into a coherent section
+_ "A Hill" edit sweep (bookmark phrase: "")

 
 near editing tier—
 
 near editing tier—

-_ "Patient's Rights" or "Patients' Rights"?
+_ explain the title
+_ so embarrassed after the Singularity

 _ mention my "trembling hand" history with secrets, not just that I don't like it
 _ NRx explanation should include the "there's only what won" line
 _ It's not clear anyone he usually respects was making this mistake; it seems likely that the original thread was subtweeting Eric Weinstein, who was not making this mistake
 _ mention my "trembling hand" history with secrets, not just that I don't like it
 _ NRx explanation should include the "there's only what won" line
 _ It's not clear anyone he usually respects was making this mistake; it seems likely that the original thread was subtweeting Eric Weinstein, who was not making this mistake

-_ mention flying to Pittsburgh had been brought up
+_ explain that "A Human's Guide to Words" / 37 Ways are the same text

 _ Noether's theorem allusion re "... Boundaries?"
 
 _ Noether's theorem allusion re "... Boundaries?"
 

+

 people to consult specifically before pt. 1–3:
 _ hostile prereader? (first-choice: April) 
 people to consult specifically before pt. 1–3:
 _ hostile prereader? (first-choice: April) 

-_ professional editor?
+- professional editor

 
 

+Needed for pt. 1-2—
+- "Thomas" 

 _ Tail (AGP discussion) [pt. 1]
 _ Tail (AGP discussion) [pt. 1]

-_ "Thomas" [blanket]
+_ Sarah (name mention, whether to name conversation) [pt. 1-3]
+_ Sophia [pt. 1-2]

 _ Anna [blanket]
 _ Anna [blanket]

-_ Sarah (name mention, whether to name conversation) [blanket]
-_ Ben/Jessica (Michael) [blanket]

 _ Scott [blanket]
 _ Scott [blanket]

-_ Divia? (ask if she wants to be mentioned?) [blanket]
-_ "Bill" [blanket]
-_ Sophia [pt. 1-2]
-
-_ "Roberta" [pt. 2]
+_ Ben/Jessica (Michael) [pt. 2-]
+_ "Bill" [pt. 3-]

 _ Alicorn: briefly, and for Melkor Glowfic reference link [pt. 2-3]
 _ "Noreen" [pt. 2]
 _ Alicorn: briefly, and for Melkor Glowfic reference link [pt. 2-3]
 _ "Noreen" [pt. 2]

-_ Lex [pt. 2]

 _ "Rebecca" (consent, pseudonym choice) [pt. 2, not before 15 June]
 
 
 _ "Rebecca" (consent, pseudonym choice) [pt. 2, not before 15 June]
 
 

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-from the top editing session— bookmark phrase "A trans woman named Sophia"
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 _ "Lenore" psychiatric disaster
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 _ "Lenore" psychiatric disaster


@@ -82,22 +50,16 @@ _ Dolphin War finish
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 With internet available—
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 With internet available—

-_ link specifically to Sophia's comment on "Wicked Transcendence"
-_ "(to some controversy)" link
-_ what is an "encyclical"
-_ Trump and Brexit and the summer of George Floyd link?
+_ define ersatz
+_ link to my Facebook post for Coming Out Day
+_ "All You Zombies"

 _ links to PA hospitals
 _ link to my Facebook posts on Azkaban, prematuring conceding the bet, and correcting the bet record
 _ links to PA hospitals
 _ link to my Facebook posts on Azkaban, prematuring conceding the bet, and correcting the bet record

-_ Scott on "right to waive your rights" and wrongful committment

 _ what did the comments on my Pittsburg/Azkaban post say?
 _ what did the comments on my Pittsburg/Azkaban post say?

-_ double-check https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Feminist_views_on_transgender_topics#Trans-exclusionary_radical_feminists_(TERFs) link
-_ gauche (I almost feel like it should be italicized as a foreign word?)

 _ check that the Feb. Blanchard Tweet is the one with the screenshot-quote
 _ check that the Feb. Blanchard Tweet is the one with the screenshot-quote

-_ look up Blanchard's h-index

 _ link to Kevin Hsu and James Cantor
 _ Is http://www.overcomingbias.com/2011/01/be-a-charity-angel.html the best link for after-the-fact prize funding?
 _ P(doom)
 _ link to Kevin Hsu and James Cantor
 _ Is http://www.overcomingbias.com/2011/01/be-a-charity-angel.html the best link for after-the-fact prize funding?
 _ P(doom)

-_ find the part of _Stranger in a Strange Land_ with the AGP telepathy!!

 _ Michael on OB in 'aught-eight on smart kids internalizing rules meant for the norm of reaction of a dumber population
 _ Tweet from Dreger
 _ when were Meeker Four out on bail? how long would they otherwise be held?
 _ Michael on OB in 'aught-eight on smart kids internalizing rules meant for the norm of reaction of a dumber population
 _ Tweet from Dreger
 _ when were Meeker Four out on bail? how long would they otherwise be held?


@@ -2650,7 +2612,7 @@ activists who want to change society are both incentivized and self-selected for
 me—
 > It looks like my social circle. (This is why I'm worried about suboptimal social norms getting locked in for the wrong reasons—what's fashionable in Berkeley in year X is likely to be mainstream in year X+20.)
 
 me—
 > It looks like my social circle. (This is why I'm worried about suboptimal social norms getting locked in for the wrong reasons—what's fashionable in Berkeley in year X is likely to be mainstream in year X+20.)
 

-in the hotel room, Michael got up to go to the bathroom, I thought the noise was specifically timed to prevent me from hearing something that I shouldn't
+

 
 [something perfectly innocent about math and dolphins](https://www.lesswrong.com/posts/esRZaPXSHgWzyB2NL/where-to-draw-the-boundaries) that wouldn't have seemed remotely controversial in 2009, and therefore, by [Noether's theorem](https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Noether%27s_theorem#Time_invariance), can't be remotely controversial in 2019
 
 
 [something perfectly innocent about math and dolphins](https://www.lesswrong.com/posts/esRZaPXSHgWzyB2NL/where-to-draw-the-boundaries) that wouldn't have seemed remotely controversial in 2009, and therefore, by [Noether's theorem](https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Noether%27s_theorem#Time_invariance), can't be remotely controversial in 2019
 


@@ -2662,3 +2624,12 @@ https://status451.com/2017/11/05/i-see-trad-people/
 my moral compass puts me to the right of the politically vocal tech nerds, especially the more androgynous type of tech nerd
 
 (There had been a moment during my psych imprisonment the other month, when I had noticeable diffculty dialing a phone. I was still a _person_, even when not all of my usual cognitive abilities were online.)
 my moral compass puts me to the right of the politically vocal tech nerds, especially the more androgynous type of tech nerd
 
 (There had been a moment during my psych imprisonment the other month, when I had noticeable diffculty dialing a phone. I was still a _person_, even when not all of my usual cognitive abilities were online.)

+
+The fact that I ghosted on music lessons from "Tricky" for being nonbinary, is an example of phenotypic capture ruining everything
+
+
+https://twitter.com/ESYudkowsky/status/1668419201101615105
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+> As usual, I got there first and solved the relatively easy philosophy problems, so the sensible people have nothing to talk about, and the unsensible ones can't just use my answer sheet.
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+(I thought about apologizing if some of the content was "weird" or offensive, but I figured if you've been a professional editor for 15 years and list memoirs as a specialty, you've probably seen everything.)