memoir: pt. 3 edit pass underway

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@@ -9,15 +9,16 @@ _ the hill he wants to die on (conclusion for "Zevi's Choice"??)
 _ Tail vs. Bailey / Davis vs. Yudkowsky analogy (new block somewhere)
 _ mention that "Not Man for the Categories" keeps getting cited
 
+first edit pass bookmark: "In an adorable twist"
+
 pt. 3 edit tier—
-_ fullname Taylor and Hoffman at start of pt. 3
-_ footnote clarifying that "Riley" and Sarah weren't core members of the group, despite being included on some emails?
-_ be more specific about Ben's anti-EA and Jessica's anti-MIRI things, perhaps in footnotes
+✓ fullname Taylor and Hoffman at start of pt. 3
+✓ footnote clarifying that "Riley" and Sarah weren't core members of the group, despite being included on some emails?
+✓ be more specific about Ben's anti-EA and Jessica's anti-MIRI things
 _ Ben on "locally coherent coordination": use direct quotes for Ben's language—maybe rewrite in my own language (footnote?) as an understanding test
-_ set context for "EA Has a Lying Problem" (written by Sarah, likely with Michael's influence—maybe ask Sarah)
-_ clarify schism (me and Vassar bros leaving the EA/rat borg?)
-_ set context for Anna on first mention in the post
-_ more specific on "mostly pretty horrifying" and group conversation with the whole house
+_ ask Sarah about context for "EA Has a Lying Problem"?
+✓ set context for Anna on first mention in the post
+✓ more specific on "mostly pretty horrifying" and group conversation with the whole house
 _ paragraph to explain the cheerful price bit
 _ cut words from the "Yes Requires" slapfight?
 _ better introduction of Steven Kaas