memoir: "A Hill" editing sweep ...

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@@ -1,4 +1,4 @@
-_ "A Hill" edit sweep (bookmark phrase: "")
+- "A Hill" edit sweep (bookmark phrase: "The language I spoke was")
 
 near editing tier—
 _ explain the title
@@ -8,6 +8,10 @@ _ NRx explanation should include the "there's only what won" line
 _ It's not clear anyone he usually respects was making this mistake; it seems likely that the original thread was subtweeting Eric Weinstein, who was not making this mistake
 _ explain that "A Human's Guide to Words" / 37 Ways are the same text
 _ Noether's theorem allusion re "... Boundaries?"
+_ smooth out "still had his email" callback
+_ Caliphate / craft and the community
+_ explain back in the _Overcoming Bias_ era
+_ pt.1 end needs to mention BABSCon (back referenced)
 
 
 people to consult specifically before pt. 1–3:
@@ -15,15 +19,15 @@ _ hostile prereader? (first-choice: April)
 - professional editor
 
 Needed for pt. 1-2—
-- "Thomas" 
+- "Thomas"
+- Ben/Jessica (Michael) [pt. 2-]
 _ Tail (AGP discussion) [pt. 1]
-_ Sarah (name mention, whether to name conversation) [pt. 1-3]
-_ Sophia [pt. 1-2]
+_ Sarah (name mention, whether to name conversation) [pt. 1-2]
+_ Sophia [pt. 1]
 _ Anna [blanket]
 _ Scott [blanket]
-_ Ben/Jessica (Michael) [pt. 2-]
-_ "Bill" [pt. 3-]
-_ Alicorn: briefly, and for Melkor Glowfic reference link [pt. 2-3]
+_ "Bill" [pt. 2-]
+_ Alicorn: briefly, and for Melkor Glowfic reference link [pt. 2]
 _ "Noreen" [pt. 2]
 _ "Rebecca" (consent, pseudonym choice) [pt. 2, not before 15 June]
 
@@ -115,6 +119,7 @@ _ Anna's claim that Scott was a target specifically because he was good, my coun
 _ Yudkowsky's LW moderation policy
 
 far editing tier—
+_ "Density in Thingspace" comment
 _ mention "Beatrice" earlier!!
 _ mention "special simulator attention" in cxn with https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ideas_of_reference_and_delusions_of_reference
 _ make sure I mention father asking me to wait before re-starting HRT